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Tonight things will be said
Things that should have been dead
The past will mix with the present
And I will need to vent

Emotions are heavy
Everything is out in the open
The water breaks the levy
This is the way this has to end

Chorus
This is the end of what we had
The end of something great
The end of the good outweighing the bad
I guess this was our fate
The end

We told each other we would be friends until the end
The end must have come sooner than thought
But do not worry my friend
There must have been a lesson taught

Lessons are hard to learn
One day I will understand
How the tide had to turn
Or if this was planned

This is the end of what we had
And the beginning of what is to come
The end of the good outweighing the bad
And start of feeling numb
The end

Lies, deceit
Our trust in each other disappears
Let's start over and not repeat
After all these years

Our bond should have held
I guess I was wrong
When I yelled
I should have seen us not holding on long

This is the end of what we had
The start of something fresh
The end of the good outweighing the bad
Maybe this is for the best
The end

This.....Is.....The.....End......
Ok.....I want to say this up front..... This piece was not written about anyone in particular.....It just came into my head while listening to a really good band called Dead Poetic... Their song "New Medicines" got me thinking about new beginnings with new people and losing the people you thought you would have by your side forever.....So, that's how this song generated.... I like this piece a lot.... Tell me what you guys think of it!
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tleach0608 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
This is another good song, I feel sadness and bitterness which is usually what happens when two people don't make it. Excellently done! =)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I'm really glad you like the piece! This is one of my favorite pieces...and will probably be a dramatic slow-ish piece....
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vermilion--vermouth Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009
I'd love to hear music for this.
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
You will be able too... but sadly... it won't be for a while... I have a band... but we haven't had any time to do anything... mainly because we live in different states.... and only one maybe two of us have our instruments at this point... so we are a band in progress... but as soon as we get something done... i will totally put a journal up on here saying that we have something done and to check out our Myspace page to hear it!
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vermilion--vermouth Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009
Okay! ^^ Good luck with the band!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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vermilion--vermouth Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2009
You're welcome. :)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Tomatogrower Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
You Have Been Featured Here :aww:
News: The Victims of My Feature
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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Tomatogrower Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:hug: You're Welcome
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: yay!
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mumblebee Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
it's a nice idea behind the lyrics, i can see a bit of thought went into them :) .. again, be cool to hear it
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I will totally write a journal on here to let everyone know when we have music to go to the pieces!
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mumblebee Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
awesome!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I can't wait to get the band started... I'm listening to Warped Tour 2009 bands right now... and I'm getting more excited by the minute!
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mumblebee Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
awww :) are you going?
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I really want to... Especially if Silverstein ends up playing in either Indianapolis or Chicago... I am totally trying to get a couple backstage passes just in case they do come... because Shane Told (lead singer, screamer) is totally my idol.... hands down I love that guy!
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mumblebee Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009  Professional General Artist
well goood luuck :)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :hug:
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kabirawhisper Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009
Nice rhyming, me thinks. I like your diction, too. XD
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I love this piece to death!
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01demai Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
There's some beautiful imagery in this piece, and you have every reason to be proud. With a good melody, it could be a great song - but I would point out (I'm not sure if this was intentional or not) the first stanza has an AABB rhyming pattern whereas the other verses have an ABAB rhyming system - if it was not intentional perhaps you could change this so the piece remains consistent :) Again with the first stanza, 'I need to vent' sounds incomplete to me - if it went into the next verse (ie something like 'I need to vent these emotions oh so heavy';) that would work really nicely. Keep working at it, there's some good stuff here :D
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much... I may change it to what you said... that is... if you don't mind me using your words....
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01demai Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Go ahead, that's what the suggestions are for :)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
alright... I will take a look at the piece and see if it makes sense to me to take whatever was there first out and change it with what you gave me... I wrote it down on a piece of paper so I wouldn't forget what it was
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whitepucko Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is really great! like it :)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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Tanly Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009
Once again
I Think that with a good melody....= awesome song
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you... this piece and Facing Mortality are going to be two of my harder pieces.... I want it to be something like a Three Days Grace meets Bullet For My Valentine meets As I Lay Dying....
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Tanly Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009
I don't listen to Bullet For My Valentine or As I Lay Dying but Three Days Grace is awesome :D
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I love BFMV and TDG... As I Lay Dying is okay.... but I have to usually be in a certain mood before I can actually listen to them...haha
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Tomatogrower Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
well done :D this would make for an incredible song :hug:
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
As soon as my band is able to start practicing together it most definitely will be a song!
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Garzla Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2009
This is a beautiful, beautiful piece that I can really imagine in a song.. :heart:
It's a concept I can relate to, having to loose someone who promised otherwise, and it's sad, yet a bit optimistic.
:) Great work overall.
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah... I lost two best friends... one to a death and another we just fell out of touch.... but I'm glad you like it!
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Garzla Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009
Aww that's always sad =(
Hope you're good now :)
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah... I'm as good as I can be! :D no worries!
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Garzla Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009
Good to hear ^^
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
yepperz pepperz!
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sweeney-todd-warrior Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Sweet! I can totally sing to this!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! I'm glad that you are able to sing to a piece I have done! Maybe once I get the music and a band you will actually be able to sing to the music and whatnot!
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sweeney-todd-warrior Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ohh! That would be awesome!!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I agree... I really want to be in a band so very badly...
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sweeney-todd-warrior Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, So do i!
That's why i'm learning how to play the guitar!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
yay! I'm going to be learning bass as soon as I buy one... I can sing a little, scream a lot, write lyrics.... so, if worse comes to worse I don't HAVE to play bass... but I would totally LOVE to though!
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sweeney-todd-warrior Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
Sameish. I'm taking a guitar class in school. I have enough singing skills to get by... i just wrote a song, but its not as great as hoped. lol
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Well, you'll get that sometimes... you think the song will be amazing... and after you write it you look back at it and think to yourself... that's not as great as it could be! It's happened to me before...
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Puppy2388 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Finally read it! Its good! Can def see that as a song
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I really hope I can make this piece into a song! That would be really cool!
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